Poem
Original Poem that inspired me:
My iteration:
May I compare you to our beloved sun?
Your presence feeds nature with its nutritious light
The freshening breeze in the summer day’s above
Feels warm compared to your breezy sight
At times the beaming wrath may feel overwhelming
Holding the emotions in starts to become a task
Fighting inner thoughts, tried to continue bearing
Surrendering to the heat feels like removing a cask
Basking in your presence was spent with no remorse
Cannot wait to see you, whenever that may be
The sunshine in my life, my life force and of course,
The reason I continue searching for a better me
The sun may be stellar, the sun may be huge
But the sun cannot compare to the beauty found in you
Analysis:
I tried to keep the same style as the love sonnet, which meant using the 14 line sonnet form. The rhyme scheme was as follows: abab cdcd efef gg. I also tried to stick with the same theme of the love sonnet, by describing a person by using nature metaphors. However, I steered away from the original poem the further I wrote. Another thing that I changed was the tone. I did not write in a Shakespeare tone, instead writing in a more modern tone that is a bit more concrete. All in all, my poem sticks with the theme and structure of Shakespeare's love sonnet 18 but differs in the delivery and tone.
